Thoughts on my poem (10 pts)?

i wrote this while high s i really don't know what it means:



lyre in my pyre of famed temperament

walk alone with deep sunrise in my shallow bones

and the aborted horizon fade too a dim back drop of a moon

steely rises coat the flimsy sky in deep purple caresses in my eye



if I were to laugh would the sea rise too?

would a rich man fade for me too soon?

these milky bones where stories are told

these shallow lies in mire and lyre?

(make my love a funeral pyre?)

sand with weary wanders walk

(stop look but don't talk)

read the cards upon the wall

Soon they will be all

That remains (the same)



its the bottle and the pipe

are wearing me down

down to the ground,

so sound the Smokey light

light for plight of

night or right

to bright for fight

for the maybe?

whisper wanton words on a shoeless

Island.

Or drink water from dry sand

Or all the rest,

I guess it鈥檚 all for the best.

(you know that it would be untrue)

To stay away, in grey days

(you know that I would be a liar)

To stay in grey when light fades

(if I was to say to you)

To whisper words of song

(girl we couldn鈥檛 get much higher)

Songs for days, and sand and bones,

And sunset鈥檚 and ship鈥檚 and railroads

And uncle鈥檚 who cared too much

(sitting by the old south gate)

For that鈥檚 all that we know

That鈥檚 all we have to show

that鈥檚 it

the end

Nothing more to sayThoughts on my poem (10 pts)?
It's a bit sad...but it's good!

You have a lot of metaphorical language in there which I really like.

It shows your feelings and emotions...Thoughts on my poem (10 pts)?
I really like it! Except I don't know what some of the words mean.